Thanksgiving

'Twas the day after Thanksgiving, when all thro' the house
Not a creature was stirring, not even a mouse;
The turkey leftovers all put away in the fridge,
The family all nestled all snug  in their beds,
While visions of Christmas commericals frighten them away

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Thanksgiving was GREAT! It's the second holiday day of the autumn/winter season's fattening; after Halloween and before Christmas. I had dinner with my family; mom, dad, and the cat. We ate early so my parents went to bed like right after six and I stayed up the dang night...

As for Thanksgiving break I've been resting, ignoring homework, playing Sims 3, and watching anime. In Sims 3 I've gotten a lot of progess with different families. The main ones i'm playing right now are an evil-ish family with a son love-struck with the childhood friend, a good family with an artist prodigy of a daughter (girlfriend of the first family mentioned), a ghostbusters family with a crazy inventing son, and a family of a "desperate house wives" drama wife who doesn't like her artistic rebellious daughter. All the children are third generation and two are second generation of adult with baby to teen if that makes sense (I played the GenerationB with GernationA as adults, now i'm playing with GenerationC with GernationB as adults- did that make sense?).

I love family stories, character development, and designing houses. Playing/living Sims... well I tend to just use cheats so I don't have to take care of them except building skills and making sure they don't age so I can take my time which doesn't always add up in the end but Sims 3 kind of fixes that with the story progression.

As for wathing anime, I'm continuing Code Geass: Lelouch of the Rebellion, almost finished with the first season and an episode before a really sad part where a character dies ='( I love code Geass, though it's really sad. Spolier alert but a vague one: if you've seen it, look up YouTube for the Janpese version because a character that dies at the end actually ends up alive but the English dub people wanted people to come up with their own versions of how it ended; you have to see it to understand it. I heard tehy are making a third season called something with R2 which is one of the main character's second name or so I've heard. However the character who "dies" at the end and who is a rather important character  does not return so I guess it doesnt matter but I still want him to come back!!!!!! [This won't make any sense unless you've seen it or read it. Which you should. A very good anime/manga]

That's enough for this post. I want to play more Sims 3 despite Saving Error Codes 12 and 13 -_- Stupid errors that doesn't save and force quit my game....

Writing and Music

So I've been writing my story Aniards which is a world where people have Animal DNA in them. I've been developing it more and differing it from when I roleplayed a possible storyline. I've also changed the world, such as continents and other kingdoms. The rankings are the same but with added families and characters. Though the main two girls are the same, Netallia and Jierra, along with their distant relatives William and Lily and their family.

SO glad for auto save drafts!!!!!!

Anyway back to the story as I interruptly went back a page and nearly lost everything I had written....

Netallia is the main character, this time younger and colder. Not sure if I'll give her an old friend like in the role-play version but I'll try it out. Of course it'll be different from that version as that was influenced by others and I plan to make this story completely my own.

I do find writing possible scenes helps me wrap my mind around what could happen and how the characters would act in another situation.

Anyway that was the writing portion of this vlog.

While writing I find listening to music is nice as it acts like background music to a scene in a movie, helps set the mood unless you're writing a tense scene while listening to some random club music :P

That's why I use my 'Apple Love' and 'Black Tears' and 'Recently Added' playlist, cause that tends to be more like the storyline tone however in the Recently Added, it's more random so it's a bit hard to write but I usually just end up tuning it out then when I start listening to it again it's music that matches the scene. :)

Happy Summer!

Friend's War Story and Writing Process

My friend wrote a story and posted a part on her blog. So I decided to read it over and edit. Yes I know it was a draft and it had many mistakes in my opinion, -such as repetitiveness- but thats what revisions are for.

My English teacher stressed much on the whole writing process. The main parts are: Braintstorming, Drafting, Revising, and Final.

Brainstorming to get your ideas out on paper and to scramble them into something that makes sense. This part should be done so well the next part flows evenly without much struggle.

Drafting to "properly" write out your thoughts into grammer structured and strained sentences. The trick is not go ahead to the next step during this process. I forget the exact reason why, but its something along the lines of not breaking the thought flow from your mind/brain to your hand through your pencil to the paper. Also you can edit later, just get everything out.

Revising is the most painful part. They are many things you should to think of: diction [replace repetitive/weak/plain/boring/redundant words with better/stronger/flavorful words]; sentence structure [not always using the same order of clauses/parts of a sentence] and length [long/meduim/short]. These are jsut a few things to think of and also largely affected on style of writing. If you are writing for a "first grader" audience, don't go and use puerile or pusillanimous, use stupid/dumb kind of words. SIMPLICITY! Think of your audience basically. Also infect the paper with your own style or a certain stlye such as old talk [something formal/Shakesphere/poetic] or southern [y'all/howdy/+'um].

Final. The last draft you have that you believe is presentable.

Yes I rambled a bit in the middle.... Now here's my version and go to the link for her original version. (I have permission to do something like this as we do know each other and I have asked to help edit :3)

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http://imaginarythoughtsofagirl.blogspot.com/2011/03/war-story.html

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“Joëlle!”
A voice shouted her name. She rolled her eyes.
“Joëlle!”
This time, much louder and sterner. Joëlle stood up from her chair and grabbed her rabbit. She walked out of the library and down the hall, running into her mother quickly.
“Where were you?”
{The queen asked.}
“No where important”
The young girl replied. Her mother kept her gaze; her daughter just stood there.
“Very well, it matters not” said the queen. “But what does matter is that Prince Abelard will arrive soon. It will be your duty to accompany him”
“Will his Uncle be coming as well?”
“Yes. Why?”
“It is just that I enjoyed his company the last time he visited”
Her mother smiled slightly.
“Well then, I expect to see you at supper tonight.”
At that her mother turned and walked away. Joëlle sighed and continued through the halls of her palace without any thought. She knew every corner and room, having grown up exploring all the nooks and crannies. Her favorite room was an old forgotten library of books rejected from the newer library built years ago. The library had a sense of emptiness with no visitors other than herself and dust collecting over the years. The small room allowed her to break down her thoughts and expose herself emotionally when she wanted to escape from her life for a little while. She glanced up at the ancient grandfather clock in the corner. Quarter to six, nearly time for supper. She sighed, another evening of sitting quietly and speaking only when spoken to.

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The {} is a part where I think should be either added to the first paragraph or at least to the part before the dialogue. Or given more information such as appearance of the queen.
Also as this is just a segment, some things I left alone such as the last sentence, because I would need to ask for an explanation of the purpose/feeling of the sentence. an example of one thought is that I remove the comma and insert 'to'

"I Love You" Story

An old story I wrote....

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“I love you”

That was his last words.

Three words.

Eight letters.

Simple yet so complex.

His feelings was all he said to her. To the wife he had left behind. I watched him die. My own blood, just pass before my eyes.

I remember when he was five and I nine, he the little puppy and I the annoyed cat. He knocked over that expensive vase of mom’s and blamed me instead. Of course mom knew the truth but still, he made me mad which caused me in trouble as I punched him.

I remember when he was nine and I had just turned fourteen. On the day of my birthday he let out his pet snake as a prank. A girl found it while going to the bathroom. She freaked out as it was her favorite animal. I laughed as my brother was punished.

I remember just a couple of years ago, he fourteen and I eighteen. I was moving out. Off to college. Thinking my brother would be glad to finally have his annoying older sister out of the house which he could rule the trouble. But he cried, not letting go.

I remember when he finally turned eighteen and I already twenty-two. He had gotten mixed with the wrong crowd. He drugged and cut himself through the pain. The pain my parents did not see as they argued and eventually divorced. I had been dating; soon later would I only discover the cheating.

Now I’m twenty-nine as today is my birthday. He could have been twenty-four. I’m married, have a four year old son and a newborn daughter. My husband is at the hospital while I here at the town cemetery. Here I am standing in front of my younger sibling’s grave. His wife is at the hospital, had already given birth to his daughter today; the little girl he never knew.

The wife he had left behind: a woman who could not show her feelings to anyone and only within the past year had she opened up to him, the first being that she had opened up to in her life. She helped him with his problems as our parents moved far away and I always traveling due to my job. She helped him not cut himself. She helped him not feel pain. She helped him not drug himself. She helped in so many ways but instead of sending her flowers or setting up a cute date. He ends up in a car cash. His life cut short by an alcoholic.

I stand before his grave. The cold winter breeze send a chill down my spine. I’m wearing the so-called- scarf he made at Christmas for me, the socks he had sewn poorly together in sewing class, and the little plastic ring he had gag-gifted to me when I turned sixteen. I may look like a dork but who cares?

Double Dream

So I had this weird dream where I was the comic hero with a strange power that made everyone put their hope on me.

That was years ago...

The other night I had that same dream but a revisit. The dream was already dark but this time it was worse, like poverty of the world worse and no one reconginzed me even though I remembered everyone. I went to the queen again, and then thats where things get fuzzy cause I have like the worst memory in the world. She kind of recongized me and told me how things got far worse since I left (I don't why I left but I know that I didn't want to go and I flew away on like a dragon). She took me through a hall then everything changed. I was another hallway (which happened last time but differently) and the evil person leader was talking to me, discussing plans. Again things get fuzzy.

The problem is now I'm going to try and turn into a story, problem is the dream is very fuzzy. And my additonal thoughts mess up what was the dream and what is my story. Plus its very dark and dirty cause the evil guys are destorying the kingdom, not that it was very nice to begin with from what I remember from coming the first time.

I bet this doesn't make any sense but then again my dreams never do.

This dream is like one of those that you're in, you're the focus but you have no control over what happens like real life but its not like real life but your own world. Mine are usually fantasy with me having some cool power. Cause what girl doesn't want to be a super hero? :)